It's cool that you put effort into this, but the biggest problem is that not everyone follows the same route. 
In fact, all Kingdoms that you get a moon in (Other than Ruined and Night Metro) have a different route depending on the person and their skill. This is less of a guide, and more of just a list of moons. There are a few that would be necessary in providing extra information due to the tricks involved. Not sure if this was supposed to be a beginners guide, or if you just put this together randomly, but the route you show is super outdated for both beginners and advanced runners. Generally we just link to Tomshi's guide for beginners, as it is updated and easy to understand

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Super Mario Odyssey Speedrun Moon List

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